Killing someone is wrong. I could never take someone's life and live with the guilt for the rest of my life. All my life I have been told think before you act, be kind and respect everyone. Killers in the world today are known as bad people, that’s their only reputation. They get thrown in jail for most likely the rest of their life all because of a mistake. So what I, Reuben Land, am getting at is that I would never and could never kill. But, I still remember the day my brother ruined his life by killing two boys.
Reuben Land is a normal American boy. His life is normal except for the minor problems and conflicts. But, his whole life turns upside down when his brother makes the mistake of killing two boys. His brother, Davy, doesn’t seem to care that he’s going to be in jail and says it was to keep his family safe.
Everything seems different for Reuben, including his little sister, who locks herself in her room and won’t show her face. With everything changing so fast Reuben doesn’t know what’s coming next or what will happen to his once normal family.
In my opinion killing is wrong. You ruin the rest of your life because you made a mistake and killed someone. I don’t know how people can live and realize they killed someone without feeling bad or regretting it for the rest of their life. This part in the book reminded me of the real world. In the USA about 16,000 people are killed every year. Most of the people are innocent and have done nothing wrong and are just killed. To me it’s sad that that many people have their lives taken from them. These people could be kids or teenagers that have a whole life ahead of them but die because of an accident. Killing is just wrong no matter what the circumstances are.
By reading this part in the book I realized that something that happened in a minute could change your life forever.
I agree about when you said teenagers have a whole life ahead of them and they die of something tragic
ReplyDeleteYour speak the truth in this piece, and it is really tragic. I agree, how could someone live with themselves if if they erased another face from the earth? This entry is stating the facts and giving a strong opinion with it. Keep writing like this, it's wonderful.
ReplyDeleteI liked your introduction. Writing in the perspective of Reuben was a good way to go. I also hear a lot of voice in this piece. I like how you tied a fact with your opinion on how killing is wrong.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you took the facts about killing people and entwined them with your own opinion. I agree with what you say as Rueben in the beginning about ruining lives.
ReplyDeleteThere was a strong thesis throughout the post. I agree with your thesis.
ReplyDeleteI agree with the part about murderers. But what about people in the military? Do you think the same about them?
ReplyDeleteI like the creative way you decided to introduce the response! The level of risk-taking is cool. I would be a little more certain in the transition however, but if you could get that transition to be stronger, it would be awesome.
ReplyDeleteGet rid of the expression "In my opinion" or "I believe" as these sort of phrases simply serve to make your voice weak, like you are unsure of yourself.
I also noticed that as the writing wore on, it seemed to become almost an assignment instead of a strong, creative response the way it began. Did you consider writing the entire piece from his perspective? That may have been interesting.
I considered writing the whole prompt in Reuben's perspective. I started with it then realized it was harder to include my opinion.
ReplyDeleteIt reminds me of a advertisement i once heard on the radio about drunk driving. it says about how he hit somebody while drunk ad now he can never wash the blood off his hands. I couldn't imagine what it would be like to kill someone and then have to live with yourself.
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